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All is bleak within this night
Time itself has paused
Surveying all the fright
That the darkness has caused

A single square continues to shine
Soft and silent, the wind carries them
Blowing them towards the bright sign
So they might commit this final sin

The queen of darkness has named her price
An innocent heart is to bleed
No longer will these lost souls suffice
Tis something more she needs

So now watch as the dark spirits arise
Each one once a good hearted man
But now as they guide though the skies
Their only thought is of freedom

Soft breathing from this forbidden light
A young girl sleeps without fear
The breath begins to freeze in the night
The dark queen’s servants are here

The lost souls place the form by her throne
Obsidian eyes shimmer at the fresh meat
Her servants now they have brought the girl home
Are rewarded with freedom in their eternal sleep

Still in slumber, the pure heart slows
The queen drains the life force away
The newly freed spirits guilt does grow
But there was a price to pay
©2005-2010 ~Falyra
:iconfalyra:

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:iconlatelemantecebat:
I like it...but once again, some of the rhythm is off, at least I think. But feel free to ignore me. :P This sounds remarkably familiar...*hint hint nudge nudge*
:iconfalyra:
Yes! I admit it, I was heavily influenced by you and a couple of your poems. You can arrest me and I will go quietly but first you must.... CATCH ME :sprint:

But seriously, I felt it was a separate creation but if you have any qualms about it... Well, you know where to find me ;)
:iconlatelemantecebat:
*shrugs* whatever. you know me. i'm just...me. and tanner's coming this weekend. and we don't have a time/place set up...and i'm worried...and scared...and not happy...
:iconnokros:
I agree about the rhythm. But I like narrative poems, indeed.
:iconfalyra:
I'll try and work on rhythm. I do like having a narrative poem though, its different. :)
:iconmotherducky:
:clap: I thought the rythm is pretty good better then mine!

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I'm the new C*A*N*C*E*R never looked b/e/t/t/e/r and you can't stand it
:iconfalyra:
Thanks, your poetry's rhythm is great, different styles you know. ;p
:iconxetha:
love it.. that's all i can say

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He is only a stranger, whom I have met before.
:iconfalyra:
:glomp: Thanks and thanks again for the fav!

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